In my opinion I think that sports is better than music because you exercise your whole body compared to music where your more exercising your brain and other parts of your body but with sports you exercise everything and you learn team work skills and all that.
Also when you exercise it burns off fat this statement is backed up by Life Education a truck that teaches us all about food and whats good for you (2021) Life Education recently came to our school to teach us this now we all know now.
I chose the second paragraph because it has my RT which is still to backup my evidence this time since Life Education came to our school recently and they were talking about how exercising burns off fat so I thought maybe I could use that in my writing this week and that's what i did.
Kia ora Jet! Wonderful piece of writing that is well set out with paragraphs and correct punctuation. Thank you for creating a DLO that clearly shows what your learning focus is and how you have achieved it. Remember to reread your work out loud to check your sentence structure makes sense to the reader. Overall fantastic effort Jet.
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